by Christina Twicken
In this blog post, I pan for some nuggets of gold in the introductory paragraph of an influential essay written by famed scholar and philosopher Cornel West entitled “The Paradox of the Afro-American Rebellion.” Here is the paragraph:
The distinctive feature of Afro-American life in the 60s was the rise on the historical stage of a small yet determined petite bourgeoisie promoting liberal reforms, and the revolt of the masses, whose aspirations exceeded those of liberalism but whose containment was secured by political appeasement, cultural control and state repression. Afro-America encountered the modern American capitalist order (in its expansionist phase)—as urban dwellers, industrial workers and franchised citizens—on a broad scale for the first time. This essay will highlight the emergence of the black parvenu petite bourgeoisie—the new, relatively privileged, middle class—and its complex relations to the black working poor and underclass. I will try to show how the political strategies, ideological struggles and cultural anxieties of this predominantly white-collar stratum of the black working class both propelled the freedom movement in an unprecedented manner and circumscribed its vision, analysis and praxis within liberal capitalist perimeters.
I share this introduction with you because it teems with lessons by which to live. Here’s a breakdown of why this introduction is so intellectually and academically “on-point.”
- Begins with a hook which directly introduces the tension that the paper will explore (the black middle class’s complicated location within the ideologies and structures of liberalism)
- Moves to explicitly state [in the underlined region] the observations (evidence) that the essay will mobilize
- Employs the first person to directly indicate originality and contestability
- Offers a succinct thesis statement [in bold] which contains:
- A clear reason why this thesis is worth arguing (to identify and examine a paradox)
- An argumentative atmosphere (I could ostensibly come back at West and suggest an alternative vision of the paradox or perhaps a resolution to the paradox)
- An explicit allusion to the subject matter around which the analysis will be framed (political strategies, ideological structures, cultural anxieties…)
The best way to improve writing is to read good writing. Don’t go and copy West’s thesis (!), but mobilize him as a model for judging the writing you do. Does your introduction hit all of the bases? Does it have a topic? Does it outline the kind of evidence that the essay will use to prove its point? Does it explicitly state why such a presentation of evidence is important/revealing/inspiring/groundbreaking/original/unobvious/interesting?
 Cornel West, “The Paradox of the Afro-American Rebellion,” Social Text no. 9/10 (1 April 1984): 44.